Rhetorical Question: Clowns, mimes, lions, balloons, the circus, whats not to like? Any person in the stands, cheering on the elephant standing on its hind legs and the tiger jumping through the flaming hoop, wouldn't see the pain and suffering all circus animals are being forced to endure. The circus is a neat American family tradition, however if these “fun-loving” circuses are to remain legal in the U.S. they need to become animal friendly.
Twist: Circuses have been an exciting tradition since the ancient Roman times. They became a place to take your family when looking for fun. But there comes a time when you need to wonder, how they trained that elephant to stand on its hind legs, or play that trumpet.
Startling Statement: Across America circus animals are being abused. They are forced to preform various acts, from riding bikes to jumping through flaming hoops. Animals are constantly struck and harmed, the violence must end.
-Fluffy (Mariah)
The first lead is the strongest, in my opinion, but the first line needs revising for punctuation. Also, the last sentence of that lead seems like it would be better suited to be the second sentence immediately following the question. That way, you can shift tone from happy and fun-loving to dark and sinister.
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